Writing visualization tool | the secret life of verbs and nouns
If you write fiction, take a closer look at your verbs with this writing visualization tool. It can help you see where the action is flagging, for more effective editing. Replacing weak verbs with stronger ones can make your story feel more dynamic.
This tool from Lancaster University highlights the verbs and nouns in your text in different colours, making them stand out clearly. Just paste in a chunk of text, and click ‘Analyze’.
To show how you might use this to help your writing and editing, here’s a section from my short story The Christmas Chair.
Visualizing Verbs – Family Dynamics
The Christmas Chair is quite a physical story, about an old man with Alzheimer’s and a family.
I was interested to see the writing visualization tool show plenty of verbs, and simple, short nouns to evoke the young narrator – crouch, eat, shout, open, pull. Even some of the nouns are verbal in nature – breathing, shouting.
I wanted the story to give an active and positive picture of Alzheimer’s, and it’s good to see that reflected in the verbs.
For contrast, here’s another story with a different kind of verb use…
Dynamic and Static Verbs – Writing Visualization Reveals Hidden Rage
This story, The Beating of Bread, is about a woman taking out her frustrations on a lump of dough.
What strikes me from the visualization below is how there seem to be fewer verbs. What’s more, they’re less dynamic – step, shuffle, strain, wonder, buried, and lots of would.
So although on the surface, the woman is labouring vigorously, the action of the story is smaller, and less present.
There also seems to be a higher proportion of nouns, and they’re longer and more complex. This suggests an altogether more ponderous and static story, despite the apparent bustle.
So the writing visualization shows a strong link between the type of vocabulary and the theme!
Nouny or Verby? Action or Static?
And, finally, here’s a writing visualization example from another genre entirely – officialese!
I was struck here by how the writing visualization shows the relatively large space taken up by nouns (blue) compare with verbs (red).
You could argue that some of the blues are adjectives, but to me they look like noun groups (I’ve studied German, where mega-nouns are normal!).
Lots of long abstract nouns in a paragraph have the effect of slowing the reader down, since we need to focus on each concept to understand it. The overall impact is ponderous, as though you’re mentally clambering from one rock to the next.
And look at those verbs! Lots of future orientation (will), passive/modals (should be). And a distinct lack of concrete, productive actions (address, review, publish (in the past), use, challenge, continue, streamline…).
Try pasting in a text from your own favourite (or not) genre!
Writing Visualization Tool | Things to Try
Lancaster University’s text visualisation tool is in alpha version and not perfect, but still offers some illuminating insights for fiction writers and editors. Here are some things to look out for when you past in writing-in-progress:
- Look closely at your verbs. Are they specific? Do their sounds echo the tone or meaning you’re after? Just as in poetry, cut/chop/thud have very different effects to slide/melt/strain. Can you make your action, sound and meaning more congruent?
- Do you use lots of verbs of perception in your fiction writing? See/feel/hear/notice types of verb can often create a sense of detachment. They act as a kind of narrative frame, by drawing attention to your character’s senses, rather than what they’re actually seeing/feeling/hearing. If you’re aiming for an immersive viewpoint, with your reader pulled right into the action of your novel, you can often to set up the overall POV convention, and then drop most of the self-referential verbs, eg I saw her red coat in the distance. It flapped in the wind (no need to say I noticed/was struck by how it flapped).
- Look at your nouns. Are they specific and concrete? Or general and abstract? Do you paint clear pictures? Or are you aiming for disorientation, or a more elusive effect?
Can text visualization help your writing craft?
Clearly, how you write and edit will depend very much on your genre and the impact you want to create for your reader. You may be writing a pacy thriller calling for lots of action verbs, or a poetic meditation that calls for subtle suggestion and evocation.
But whatever you’re writing, text visualization can help. For me, editing is a kind of focus-pulling – tuning up what’s important, and reducing what doesn’t matter. Text visualizations like this gives a degree of objectivity that’s hard to find when you’re deeply immersed in the flow of your writing.
What did you analyse? What did you find out? I’d love to hear your thoughts below.
Jules Horne is a writer and teacher on the MA in Creative Writing at the Open University.
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Visualization and immersion: How authors make fiction come alive
If it’s good enough for Jodi Picoult, it’s good enough for us.
You know those wonderful stories with a complicated protagonist who goes through a profound internal struggle? Where you can see her in your mind’s eye and experience exactly what she’s feeling? You temporarily forget you’re just reading – that you’re not actually the character herself. Every writer wants their characters to feel so real you can not only reach out and touch them but actually walk around in their skin. But how do you make it happen?
Here are two methods that will help you zap readers right into the heads of your characters.
Visualization in the dark
I like to practice what I call “writing blindfolded” (well, I actually just close my eyes). Before you bruise a rib from raucous laughter, just give it a try. Let’s write about someone going through an embarrassing experience; think of a time when you suffered an embarrassment.
Now, close your eyes.
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Transport yourself to a time when something outrageously humiliating happened to you. Imagine yourself in that very moment. What do you hear? See? Smell? And most importantly, what do you feel?
What is your body language? Are your shoulders slumped in surrender? Is your head hanging low, looking down at your feet? Are your cheeks hot to the touch and turning a bright apple-red? Are you trying to make yourself invisible? Are there people around you who saw what happened? Are they laughing or defending you? Are there any smells surrounding you? (Does the scent of freshly baked school cafeteria yeast rolls still make you want to run and hide?)
Now I’ll close my eyes.
I am again twentysomething, hustling into work, my nose running from the cold wind. I speed-walk through the parking lot and count my steps – one, two, three… I wear my calf-length woolen dress coat over my office attire, stockings and high heels included. Seventy, seventy-one, seventy-two…At last, I come to the periphery of the parking lot, enclosed by a foot-high metal cord. Two things happen that make me want to melt into the concrete. First, I notice my half-slip with the loose elastic waistband has just fallen and puddled around my ankles. Oh crap! I scan the parking lot – did anyone see my pitiful wardrobe malfunction? Once sure I’m alone with my embarrassment, I grab my slip and hike it back up to where it belongs. Next, as cars whiz by on the street beside me, I lob my leg over the enclosure cord and unfortunately catch the heel of my pump in my coat’s hem, then tumble to the ground. The humiliation rises up my neck and blossoms across my cheeks. The only thing I know to do is pop back up as if nothing has happened. Denial is a magical thing! I brush off tiny pieces of gravel clinging to my coat, then run across the street. Eighty, eighty-one, eighty-two.
Now think about a scene you’re writing for your current work-in-progress. Close your eyes and zoom in on your character. Imagine yourself in her skin, down to every last detail, and put these elements down on the page.
Visualization via immersion
If you have the time and means, another wonderful method to intimately visualize your characters, their environment, and how they would react in any given circumstance is to totally immerse yourself in their world. Like learning a new language, having to live it makes you absorb it from the inside out.
Jodi Picoult, New York Times best-selling author of 22 novels, is a master at taking readers into the intimate lives of her characters. She uses a very physical method to capture their thoughts, feelings, and how they react to the circumstances she creates for them.
“I find that visualization comes best from immersion. I do extensive research to learn what my character does, where she comes from, who she associates with, what her history may have been. Walking through those experiences personally, and meeting with those who actually live the life I am planning to have my character live, allows me to pick and choose moments and images, and weave them together into a fictional character’s life,” she says.
As an example, for her 2012 novel Lone Wolf, Picoult visited Shaun Ellis, author of the memoir The Man Who Lives with Wolves, to learn about his work at The Wolf Centre and Foundation. He even taught her how to howl and get a response from wolf packs in return. Now that’s immersion!
Whatever method you use, just remember that to have fully fleshed-out characters in your fiction, you’ve got to include all the details: their appearance, environment, sensory perceptions, and inner thoughts and beliefs. So whether you close your eyes or physically immerse yourself in their place in the world, make sure you capture those intimate particulars that make all of us real.
K.L. Romo writes about life on the fringe: Teetering dangerously on the edge is more interesting than standing safely in the middle. She is passionate about women’s issues, loves noisy clocks and fuzzy blankets, but HATES the word normal. Her historical novel, Life Before, is about two women separated by a century who discover they’ve shared a soul. Web: KLRomo.com or @klromo.